Wednesday, 16 September 2015

My made up legend

WALT create our own a Myth / legend 


Co-constructed SC:

keep your writing in order:
beginning, middle and end
make sure you have your plan
put it into your own words
use more interesting words, 
time connectives - suddenly, later, unexpectedly, meanwhile, next minute...after that
proof read your writing
highlighter strategy

Editing your story is a very important  - Make sure you read it through carefully and check:
Will your story make sense to your reader and will it interest them?
Have you given a satisfactory ending?
Is your spelling correct?
Make sure you have used a range of punctuation ,  .  !  “  “  ?  (  ) 
 Start a new paragraph for:
•A change of time, e.g. Early the next morning…
•A change of place e.g. On the other side of the mountain stood…
•A change of action e.g. At that moment the lights went out.
•A change of character e.g. Unexpectedly, Dr Townley rounded the corner.

Once upon a time there was a gamer named bob and his older brother named Qwade it was in the middle of 2035 Qwade and bob bought a awesome TV that could plug in every single console (even arcade machines mobile consoles and even iPads iPhones iPods phones tablets and other things like that) but all of sudden a portal came out of TV "wow what's happening right now!" Yelled bob "do you think I would know" yelled Qwade so they both got sucked into that portal bob got smashed onto some kind of question mark block Qwade comes towards bob "bob wake up" said Qwade "uhh what happened why is there turtles walking on two feet here and what are with the big brown triangle things with feet eyes and a mouth" as bob was looking at his strange surroundings all of a sudden a shell was sliding towards them bob and Qwade jumped over the shell but the shell hit the question mark block and a mushroom came out of it "what the heck is that" said bob going to touch it "wait bob don't touch it it might dangerous" as bob ignored his big brother when he touched the mushroom he turned bigger "what the heck just happened" said bob "you became bigger when you touched the mushroom" said Qwade "wow what is this strange place anyway" said bob "I don't know where we are but I know we can get back to our home" but all of sudden a plumber came out of nowhere and yelled (sorry I can't spell are speak Italian so it has to be in English sorry if you wanted Mario to be Italian) "hey you" "who me" said bob "yes you you stole the mushroom I got out of the question mark block" yelled the Italian plumper "hey wait you're the one who almost killed us with your shell" yelled Qwade "I don't care about you now stand still so I can get my star man" but then all of a sudden sonic the hedgehog was there and stole Mario's starman and gave it to Qwade "mario why are you doing this they are properly people from new games don't you remember the last 83 times you tried to beat up new characters including me" said sonic the hedgehog "but these people look suspicious because they said that they would die you can't die here" said Mario the plumber then all of a sudden Kirby and mega man came fighting mega man couldn't beat Kirby because Kirby ate his attacks and turned into mega Kirby and beat up mega man "whoa what is happening right now" said bob and Qwade at the same time for no exact reason "oh they are just fighting because sometimes video game characters fight for who's going to get to be in the next game right now Kirby and megaman are fighting for Kirby remastered or mega man remastered it's going to be one big fight" said sonic "hey what's this star thing do" said bob bob touched the star and then became invincible "wow why are you suddenly a different colour" then the chaos emeralds fell out of nowhere (the mailman is really bad at his job) and fell on Qwade "Qwade why is your whole body suddenly yellow" said bob "hey were did you get the chaos emeralds" (again the mailman is bad at his job because he is a flying koopa and they are really bad at their jobs) all of a sudden chell came out of nowhere (chell is the character from portal that you play as and of course she can't speak) she came with a wizard a Mage and a dryad (they are all magic of course) "we came here to look for two humans called bob and Qwade" said the wizard "you're looking for us why?" said Qwade "you two aren't from around here aren't you because you're from the world of gamers" said the Mage "wait they are from the gamer world how did I not recognise them one of them always played my old games wow it was the best but how did they get here" said Mario "they found a way to get here there were so much pixels that the pixels made a portal" said the Dryad "and the only way out is if you collect seven special items from random games remember each item has to be from different games" said the wizard "you already have 2 items but you used them which will mean you will have to find them again don't worry there are 7 paths to go choose wisely" said the Mage "there is 7 paths one will send you to bowser's castle the other leads you to eggman's base the death egg  this one will take you to the place where zelda is trapped (and you will have help from link) no one knows what will happen except link a brave and noble warrior or something yeah so let's move on this one is dr Wiley's evil fortress this way it's luigi's haunted mansion (did I mention it's haunted) this way we have the evil house/box of the ghosts (it's from pac man) this way is donkey kong's destroyed construction site (this is from the first game with Mario) and that's it" said the dryad so yeah Qwade and bob splited up to find these items right now we are going to keep track with bob he on his way to bowser's castle Mario helps because peach has been kidnapped again after he saved peach bob got the special item it was peaches cake (because it's just Really delicious ok) Qwade goes and beats up egg man with sonic and got the chaos emeralds then bob went saved zelda with link link gave his sword yay bob got another item Qwade goes with mega man and beats dr Wiley and Qwade got a spare mega buster bob goes to get the ghosts he got the ghosts with Luigi and Luigi gave bob his vacuum qwade goes to pacmans house so they can get the ghosts they got rid of the ghosts and Qwade got a power pellet bob went to save Marios old girlfriend Mario is helping for no reason at all they beat up donkey kong and Qwade got a hammer yay so now they got all the items they get back home and got to make a animation of this adventure remember kids don't buy something before anyone else or if it hasn't been tested yet. By Qwade

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